Fraught not, my fists are taught
Ready to fight, without flight, or fright.
You, I do not fear, I hear, I'm here, my path is clear.
Without pain, there is no gain, no refrain, I'm not the same
As You.
So I stand tall, I'll never fall, dare not crawl
Away.
Stand my ground, in ropes I am bound by a "Sound
Society."
So now I am caught, the freedom I've sought
has escaped just beyond my grasp, stolen from my clasp.
Do not tempt my wrath. For that will never surface.
I lie here repressed, oppressed, nothing to confess.
Staring up at the ceiling, I must begin my healing, I must rid me of this pain I am feeling.
Although lost I remain, I must also remain sane, without any pain
there is no gain. It is ingrained into my brain
that my freedom is my own and it shall never change.
Gone are my rights, but yet I don't fight, I must write
Oh dear God, I must write!
So I leave you my words, praying they'll be heard, clasped in the claw of a bird.
Let my message reach you, touch you, complete you.
If so then my work here is done.
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Ok, here goes.
The proper title is "The Pen: The Final Freedom of a Martyr" but it won't fit x.x So here is the explanation: The poem is about a protester in the 1960's. Although I refer to the protester in this comment as a "He," I have left it up to the reader to decide the gender. It can be applicable to girls in the relation to the Suffragettes...the point I'm trying to make is that there are no gender differences when it comes to ones rights and ones freedoms being torn away. First Stanza: The fist represents that the protester is strong in his beliefs and is willing to fight for them. He says that he does not fear his oppressors "You I do not fear." In the last line he states that he is aware that there will be suffering and sacrifices but he is willing to pay the price "without pain, there is no gain." Second Stanza: In this stanza the protester is at the rally itself "Standing tall," still protecting his beliefs. He is trying to break the ropes which he is bound "I am bound by a "Sound Society." Third Stanza: In this stanza the protester is being caught and manhandled by he police. He talks about how his freedom has "escaped just beyond [his] grasp." In the last lines he warns the policeman not to evoke his wrath because it will never come. This relates back to the idea about Martin Luther King's non-violent protest. Fourth Stanza: In this stanza, the protester is in jail. He spends the next line in an identity crisis and is trying to find out who he really is. The last 3 lines are him urging others to spread his message. FIRST EDIT: - Changed the third stanza in response to criticism on it. Now it distinguishes the types of freedom being lost as "freedom of rights" SECOND EDIT: - Changed the last stanza. Rhyming scheme goes through the roof! I consider this the climax of the poem, and its a wonder I didn't have it to begin with. What happens is that he realizes that his freedom "will never change." He also realizes that this is the sacrifice he was talking about in the first stanza, and he learns to accept it. THIRD EDIT: - Added a comma to the first stanza and moved part of the third stanza to the fourth. It seems to fit more seamlessly in there |
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First off, I really like it the way it is, but if I had to change it, I would increase the emphasis on the "freedom" he has in the last stanza.
And in the third when it says his freedom has "escaped," it seems to me like that this freedom being taken from him then is different from the freedom that stays with him in the end, so I'd find a way to distiguish the difference
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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.
Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!
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For the first one how do you mean put emphasis on it? Like he is still holding onto the last shards of the freedom he once had?
And second, initially it was the freedom of rights that he lost when he lost his right to protest. The freedom that stays with him until the end is the freedom to be whomsoever he wants to be. So I'm guessing you just want me to make that a little clearer? hmm...thats a toughie but sure I'll go ahead and try :-D
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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.
Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!
Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.
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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.
Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!
Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.
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If you LOVE it then suggest it to a GM - now!
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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.
Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!
Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.
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Religion comforts the afflicted and afflicts the comfortable.
Worker of the world unite! You have nothing to lose but your chains!
Porta den man di Dios, porta den man di mi. Todo el mundo, hasi semper fuerte e nos is por biba e din cielo.
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